College video (beginner)

[pafilmuokim]

This was one of the first videos i made. It was made for some kind of fun with intention to present the college i studied in. You won't be able to understand the language as it is Lithuanian but the main idea is: A graduate from secondary school decides to chose college but he has no idea where to study or what.. you'll see the rest
It was made with consume camcorder. I do notice many mistakes (such as terrible keying, because of simple wall used as a green screen) but i'd like to know your oppinion.
Thanks
you can watch both parts (if you decide that it's worth 14 minuttes of your time) at:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7JDnFr7idq0&mode=related&search=
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Cawb-758v-g&mode=related&search=

[pafilmuokim]

see... nothing worth to coment :( try to make something better :cool:

[Z Cheema]

Its tough at the top

[pafilmuokim]

yeah.. it's one of my first ones, unfortunately i'm not allowed to post anything from my TV programme...

[johnxl1s]

Shame, keep at it.
best
john.

[dominicwitherow]

Unfortunately YouTube makes most videos look worse than they might actually be. But, I think it does show that you are trying to be inventive and original.

Your major issue is scripting. The films are way too long and just can't hold the viewer's attention as a result. Try and cut them down to no more than three minutes. My professional experience is in making webfilms to advertise senior jobs at UK local authorities and the like. Having discussed the films with many, many applicants for the roles, it is clear that people just don't watch for more than about two and a half to three minutes. If you want them to, you really have to show them something amazing.

I liked the basic ideas, but try and squeeze all that energy into a much smaller, more concise package and you'll have a much better film.

Dominic